Evan's Lyrics

[EvenInDeath46]

I used to write a lot of songs when I was younger (they're kind of bad, but I could post them later). I wrote the song below in November of 2006. I've actually written a few more new songs as well. I just need to edit the lyrics, and then I could post them later. In the meantime, feel free to critique my lyrics, interpret my lyrics, or do whatever you want with them.

Revelation

The ghost of yesterday
Has been buried alive
My passion burns with desire
Through the flames of my love's fire
But the ashes of my heart have been blown away
And the embers of what remain
Thought that you would have changed
Yet everything remains the same
Why should I take the blame for your mistakes?
Just believing in you, is that all it takes?

You cannot admit your own guilt to yourself
Judging by your words, you don't seem to even care
Then you let all your hate and outrage fall on me
As an attempt to try and win your own way in life

Sickened in the shadows of your own dismay
A glimpse of light shines through
And you decide to run away
Hide in the darkness forever
Because you're too afraid to face the truth
Of someone who may love you for who you are
And careless of what they may think

But I guess you never felt that way
It was only a smile on your face
Which I foolishly perceived as something more
That could allow us to fly to somewhere far away
Where it could only be ended by the knock of a door
But it was nothing more

And then I remember that you hate me
And you blame me for all that you've done
Break me from the promises
And separate me from your lies
I will never be pulled into the depths of your eyes
And I will never ever dream of you again

I thought that we could stand the test of time
But that has all come to a complete end

© Evan P.

[gloomysunday]

Wow. I'm kinda speechless.

Okay, first, I LOVE the first two lines (The ghost of yesterday Has been burried alive ), they're just amazing (and I have a hard time not stealing them ) and the pictures you use are all very powerful. Of course all the different pictures can sometimes be a problem, because somewhere inbetween the meaning of the whole piece can get lost; it just gets a bit too much. But nethertheless you do a good job combining them and this is an excectional piece! I just always try to bring some criticism in my comments on other people's work, because I appreciate the same thing when it comes to my own poems.

[EvenInDeath46]

Thanks. I appreciate you commenting and criticising my song. I know what you mean by using too much different imagery along the lines of the meaning of song. This song was actually inspired by something that really happened in my life, but of course I probably overdramatized it. That's what I do to make my songs have more emotion in them usually. So, all the metaphors and whatnot I've used are actually linked together to tell the story and emotions that the protagonist feels in the situation. I can explain what each metaphor translates to literally if you would like me to.

Oh, by the way, would you like me to post one of my older songs from when I was younger?

[gloomysunday]

evenindeath46 said:

Oh, by the way, would you like me to post one of my older songs from when I was younger?

Of course . I know my beginnings and lets just say ýours can't be worse. And it's always interesting to see the "early work"...

As for it getting too much... it kinda works in the lyrics you posted and I really, really love them. I just often see it when it comes to my own work - especially personal stuff - that I want to bring in everything. Of course, real life is complicated, but in the end it's a poem or a song and not a novell. You linked the imaginary very well and for me it definetely describes different emotional parts in that relationship/break up, on both sides. And I just realized that it really grows on me. The first time reading it I got the basic stuff (the imaginary and what it's about for me) and after reading it a few times it all gets linked to each other. If you want you can explain those metaphors to me, I only hope they're a little similar to the idea I got. I would love to hear how the fire part relates to the following lines:

Thought that you would have changed
Yet everything remains the same
Why should I take the blame for your mistakes?
Just believing in you, is that all it takes?

because I didn't quite get that.


Beside that... can I please, please steal the first two lines? You get credited and everything (and of course I don't do it for profit anyway...) and you can read first whatever my little mind makes out of it, if I come to a pleasing result.

[EvenInDeath46]

gloomysunday said:

Beside that... can I please, please steal the first two lines? You get credited and everything (and of course I don't do it for profit anyway...) and you can read first whatever my little mind makes out of it, if I come to a pleasing result.

Okay. You can use those two lines if you really want to. You have my permission.

gloomysunday said:

If you want you can explain those metaphors to me, I only hope they're a little similar to the idea I got. I would love to hear how the fire part relates to the following lines:

Thought that you would have changed
Yet everything remains the same
Why should I take the blame for your mistakes?
Just believing in you, is that all it takes?

because I didn't quite get that.

Hmmm... well I guess in that first verse/stanza (whatever you want to call it) I do make quick jumps from one idea or thought to another. So, really the fire thing just explains how the protagonist feels love for the other person, but ultimately the love, like the "fire," begins to die out because the other person doesn't love the protagonist how he/she envisioned it.

And then there's a quick jump to the next idea/message:

Thought that you would have changed
Yet everything remains the same
Why should I take the blame for your mistakes?
Just believing in you, is that all it takes?

Basically, this shows that the protagonist and the other have got into some fights/quarrels before and it is a reoccurring habit for the both of them. However, the other (the antagonist) is the one who truly starts these fights and has a tendency to blame the protagonist for them. The protagonist always hopes that the antagonist will learn from this bad habit and better himself/herself, but instead it continues on and dwells within the antagonist. But this certain fight is different than the others, because a revelation (hence the title of the song) has been shown. The antagonist has revealed a secret that he/she has been keeping for a long time from the protagonist, but when the protagonist learns of this truth, the antagonist covers up his/her tracks and tries to hide this revelation like it never even happened. When the protagonist says that he/she still believes what the antagonist had told was true, the antagonist becomes angry and pushes the protagonist out of his/her life.

And that's basically what that is all about. Sorry that had to be so long.



Okay, here is a really old song that I wrote when I was 13-years-old and in 7th Grade. It's kind of dumb and could use some editing (I actually remember posting a portion of it and offering DarkFlare89 to edit it for me in his own way). I did actually make a recording of it in acapella and, really, it sounds like a dying puppy. Oh well, here goes nothing:


Tears Are Not Enough

I wake up in the morning
The time has come for another day
How I fear for the screaming
I can't deal with this pain

Please, please can you stop the pain
Convince me that it’s always my fault
For what you do to me
Now it’s been so long
That I don’t know what's true anymore

Tears are not enough
To wash away the pain
Tears are not enough
To erase the time
Tears are not enough
To hide away these wounds
Tears will never be enough
To make me forget everything

I still remember back to when I was young
Now I regret every time I see you
Please don’t just turn away
Even though I know you cannot cease my hurting
It’s better than you not noticing me at all

Tears are not enough
To wash away the pain
Tears are not enough
To erase the time
Tears are not enough
To hide away these wounds
Tears will never be enough
To make me forget everything

Someday maybe I'll escape from you and your life
To make you realize how much pain you're putting upon me
But I know that your lies will never be altered
And my tears are everything
And I have to live my life like this forever

Tears are not enough
To wash away the pain
Tears are not enough
To erase the time
Tears are not enough
To hide away these wounds
Tears will never be enough
To make me forget everything

Tears are not enough
Tears are not enough
Tears will never be enough at all

© Evan P.

[gloomysunday]

Well, I don't think that it's bad at all, but maybe that's only me. It creates a strong emotional response for me. I doubt I can interprete it well, but it reminds me of the situation I was in when I started writing, which still inspires some of my own work. At that time I had no chance but to end a friendship (my only "real one"), because it was painful just to speak to her, to see her, knowing that the friendship would never mean anything to her, that she would always keep me out of her life and that she would always treat me... well, lets say bad.

That's the thing your lyrics remind me of. Well, there's obviously emotional pain in there, that is connected to the other person. There's also a reoccuring "question", who's fault it was, the protagonist almost wishes to believe the lies of the antagonist, that it was in fact, his own fault. I'm not able to tell what really happened between them, for me it was the above described .


Thanks for your explanation on Revelation, it really helped me to understand it better.
Oh, and thank you for letting me use those lines .

[imaginery]

beautiful, Evan
loads of words trying to express so many feelings, which actually cant be described in their whole dimension right?
do you already have any melodies for your songs?? would be interested in that.

go and tell me what you think about mine

[EvenInDeath46]

Wow, time sure does fly by.

I remember writing my first songs with my cousin when I was about 12 years old for our band. Some of those songs were pretty silly. And I remember writing a bunch of songs up until I was about thirteen; then, beginning to record some of my songs when I was about two months shy of being fourteen. I used to record a lot more, especially back in 2004 and early 2005, but I still do it sometimes. Unfortunately, I lost some of my older songs and my only way of knowing the lyrics to my older songs is through my recordings, and I never recorded some of the songs which results in them being gone forever. When I was sixteen I began to write songs again, first with "Revelation" above, then during my Spring Break in 2007, and more during July of that year. After that period, I tried to write more songs in the Fall of 2008 when I lent my songs to my friend for her to use her voice on, but it didn't totally work out. After that I didn't write a song until last May, when I wanted to use a song for a project in my Film Class and it came out very well in the recording. Now, after all that I have been through, I am inspired to write more new songs. I actually wrote something recently that was an old idea which I updated and I thought came out pretty well.

I don't know if it would be such a good idea to post more lyrics here now, since they could be stolen. What I really need to do is copyright things I have written so that they can be protected. I don't mind posting my really old lyrics though because I know that they aren't very great, but not completely bad either. If anyone is interested, just let me know. Maybe I could even upload some recordings?

[Robynn]

If you post them here, it's time and date stamped, so if someone uses them, you'll have proof that they're yours, and since I'm ADMIN, I'd testify that you can't change the date and time stamps, and neither can I. Posting them here, actually covers your butt.

One of these days, when you think you can, e-mail what's up with you.... I'd like to help you, if you'd like me to, even though it appears as though you're pretty much over whatever happened.

Hopefully, you can get your songs out there for others to sing, or to sing yourself. Then I can say "I knew him when..."